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Editor-Proof Your Writing, 21 Steps to Clear Prose

This is a guest post from Don McNair, an editor and the author of Editor-Proof Your Writing: 21 Steps to the Clear Prose Publishers and Agents Crave.

You can read my review of his book on my April 11 post about his book.

Let me know what you think in the comments. Don will be awarding a commenter a copy of any book from his backlist.

Cover of Editor-Proof Your Writing

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The Airplane Ride That Changed Everything

Or: A new way to self-edit

My writing life—and that of many others—changed the day I flew from Chicago to Atlanta to interview someone for a client’s story.

I’d been a writer and editor all my life; eleven years a magazine editor, six a PR feature writer and editor, and for several years head of my own firm, McNair Marketing Communications.  I’d edited many other writers’ work—even that of professional writers—and often wished that somehow they could learn to edit themselves.  That appeared impossible, of course.

But I was wrong!

What I learned on that airplane opened my eyes to that, and led to my writing “Editor-Proof Your Writing: 21 Steps to the Clear Prose Publishers and Agents Crave.”

The Discovery

Out of boredom on that flight, I was editing a fog-filled paperback.  I soon realized the same mistakes appeared over and over, and was intrigued.  I bought another paperback at the Atlanta airport and edited it on the way home.  A pattern emerged, and I became excited.  Had I discovered the writer’s Rosetta stone?

Over the next several months I edited many other paperback novels.  I joined critique groups and judged writing contests, and aggressively edited other writers’ fiction.  I eventually plowed through all those manuscripts from pre-published authors and the marked-up paperback books, and painstakingly sorted thousands of offending sentences and other problems by type.  I eventually identified twenty-one distinct problems.  Today I call their solutions, appropriately enough, the “Twenty-One Steps to Fog-Free Writing.”

The inference staggered me.  Just as there’s a specific number of elements in chemistry’s Periodic Table and letters in the alphabet, there’s also a specific number of fog problems in writing.  I realized many unnecessary words are actually tips of bad-writing icebergs, and that eliminating those words resolves otherwise complicated editing problems.  In fact, almost half the Steps actually strengthen action while shortening sentences.  You can see it happen right before your eyes.

So, here’s the good news.  You don’t have to be an English major to achieve this writing miracle.  You don’t have to diagram sentences or study verb declensions, whatever they are.  You don’t have to learn complicated rules, wade through thick manuals of style, or immerse yourself in the technical mumbo-jumbo of a book on editing.  Applying what you learn in “Editor-Proof Your Writing” will make you a better writer than would struggling with any of those.

Here’s why.  Most editing manuals are like geography books that give great information but don’t show how to get from place to place.  This book is a GPS that leads you through the writing jungle to solve your specific writing problems.

Most editing manuals are like dictionaries from which you’re asked to select words to write the Great American Novel. This book shows what specific words to use and what ones not to use.

This book is not loaded with theory.  It instead presents knowledge a step at a time, and asks you apply what you learned—a step at a time—to your Work-In-Progress’s first chapter.  You’ll also edit a nine-chapter melodrama along the way, and check your editing against mine. When you’ve worked through this book you’ll have an editor-proof first chapter, and will be ready to edit the rest of your book.  You’ll learn how to write sparkling, clear, powerful copy that attracts readers, agents, and editors.  And sales.

Does it really work?

That sounds great, but does it really work?

To find out, I taught the material in two online editing courses over the past three years.  One class involved putting words into a story (Part 1 of the book), the other taking them out (Part 2).  The latter presents the 21 Steps I discovered on that airplane.  Part 3, titled “Sharing your words,” covers such things as working with critique partners, professional editors, publishers, and agents.  It also discusses writing query letters and synopses.

At the end of each class I asked basic questions about the students’ experiences, so I could fine-tune the classes.  The overwhelming majority gave rave reviews.  (You can read them on my website http://DonMcNair.com .)  Here’s just a sampling:

“Don, I have to take time out from editing my WIP to tell you how much I am enjoying your class. The information you give us is fabulous. I just counted the books I have purchased in the last twelve months dealing with writing. Twenty-seven!  Twenty-seven books that have given me less usable information than your one class. Thank you. Thank you!”  Linda Cousine

“I loved the class. For years people told me my writing wasn’t clear, yet never explained why it wasn’t. Your class explained why. I rate the class a ‘ten.’”  Charlotte Summers

“Thank you so much for this class. I learned a ton that I can even use in my day job of writing marketing copy, so it was sort of a two-fer.” Linda Fletcher

 “This was the most detailed, spot-on, editing advice I’ve ever gotten, bar none. The lesson format conveyed a lot of information in a simple, elegant form. And you brought my attention to errors I was still making despite having taken other classes on the subject. I had no clue how many mistakes I was making. Once I picked my jaw up off the floor, I realized what a wake-up call you’d given me.” Patricia Davis

“I LOVED this class. I wanted to let you know that this is, hands-down, the best class I’ve ever taken. It is immediately useful, and is taught logically and with enough examples that it is easy to see the problems in my own writing. Thank you so much for offering such a wonderful resource. I’m excited about looking at my WIP again! And, oh boy, can I see the difference after taking this class. Thank you!!!” Suzy Short

“I have mixed feelings about class ending tomorrow. I’ve learned so much, and I don’t want it to end! I started with a 105,600-word WIP, and have “de-fogged” it down to 100,000. If this class went on much longer I might be sitting here with a short story, instead of the next great American novel!”   Capri Smith

 That’s a lot of heartwarming responses from newer writers.  But what do the old pros think?  To find out, my publisher (Quill Driver Books) sent Advance Reading Copies (ARCs) out to several.  Here’s what they said:

Don McNair’s Editor-Proof Your Writing is the perfect workshop-in-a-book for fiction writers, and a must-have for any beginner.”  New York Times bestselling author Dianna Love

 “McNair offers great editing tips that will be sure to strengthen your manuscript!”  USA Today bestselling author Cynthia Eden

“All writers, seasoned or newbie, should read, absorb, and put to use the lessons Don McNair offers in Editor-Proof Your Writing.”  New York Journal of Books

Of course, the real proof is in what the book will do for your writing. I predict you’ll be pleasantly surprised at how much it will help.  

Don McNair is a professional editor and the author of ten published novels and non-fiction books.  His latest, “Editor-Proof Your Writing: 21 Steps to the Clear Prose Publishers and Agents Crave,” can be reviewed and ordered at his website, http://DonMcNair.com.

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Rhymes to Remember Proper Use of There, Their, They’re, Theirs, and There’s

One thing that drives me crazy, and may do the same to you is when people misuse the words in the title of this post. My students have trouble knowing which to use when, so I came up with these simple pointers to teach them the proper use of the homophones for the word “there.”

One week, I’ll make a spelling list of nothing but the words there, their, they’re, theirs, and there’s.  I teach these rhymes to remember which is used when.

When to Use There, Their, or They’re

Location

When you’re writing about WHERE,

If it’s not HERE, it’s always THERE.

Notice how the location words all have the spelling HERE inside them? Point that out to your students. That’s the trick to remembering THERE.

Ownership

Once upon a time a little HEIR

Lived inside of the word THEIR.

When he was joined by other HEIRS

The things they owned became all THEIRS.

Notice again the spelling of the word HEIR  inside the ownership version of THEIR.

Apostrophes

If your sentence can use THEY ARE

Put an apostrophe into THEY’RE.

When THERE IS  fits the sentence heard,

THERE’S an apostrophe in the word.

We spend the week learning these tips, and using them in context. At the end of the week, I give them a test. It’s a reading passage with all the homophones for the word “there” removed. They must write the correct spelling of each one in the empty spots.

For example I read this aloud, filling in there, their, and there’s. The students must write the correct spelling in each blank.

________ are fifty states in the United States. Some of ___________ names have historical significance. _____________ a trick to remembering _________names in alphabetical order.

By the end of a week, most students have mastered the proper use of these troubling words. In fact, one of my students went home last month and taught his parents how to use these words. (I hope they didn’t find it annoying to have their ten-year-old teach them grammar!)

If these words give you trouble, they won’t any longer, after you learn these rhymes to remember them.

Going to a Writer’s Conference?

There are so many writers conferences to choose from these days. You just need to decide what you want to get out of a conference, and then find one that fits your needs.

One conference I’m just about jumping out of my seat for  is Margie Lawson’s Sierra Lake Tahoe retreat this May. I’ve taken Margie’s classes before, and learned so much from them.

Margie is an acclaimed speaker and a psychologist. She uses her knowledge of human behavior and body language in her unique system she calls EDITS. This system taught me how to inject emotion and tension into my writing. I’m still practicing and learning, which is why I’m excited to go to this conference and practice with her in person.

Due to what I learned from her, I give her some of the credit for my first book sale, and I even mentioned her in the dedication. From now until April 30, you can enter to win a free copy of that book, Shades of the Future, in my Goodreads giveaway.

The last time I checked, the conference was still open for registration. If you’re interested in it, more information is here. FYI, I don’t get any kickback for sending you to this link, I just want to share something that I know works.

I’m excited to attend this conference. If you decide to go, let me know. I’d love to meet you in person, too.

Does it Pay to Advertise on Goodreads and Facebook?

Advertising. Promotion. Keeping the buzz going. As authors, we all know that most of the PR work falls in our own laps.

This month and next, to promote my books, I’m doing a Goodreads giveaway, Goodreads advertising, and Facebook advertising for my Suzanne Lilly Author page as an experiment to see how well they work.

At the same time we’re doing all this promotion, we’re expected to craft our next novel. Which should be even better than the first. So not only do we need to be fabulous writers, we must be marketing phenoms.

Last July my first novel, Shades of the Future, was released with much fanfare and book blog touring. If you missed all the excitement, you can still see the blog posts for the six weeks I was on tour. Now six weeks on tour translated to about twelve weeks of PR work, considering the time it took to contact bloggers and reviewers, set up a schedule, write the blog posts, send them the media kit, reply to comments, handle the giveaways, and so on and so on.

Whew!

It was a tremendous amount of fun.

It was also tremendously exhausting.

I didn’t get any writing done during the summer.

As a teacher, summer is the time of year when I normally get a great deal of writing done. So when the end of summer came, and I hadn’t even started my next novel, I decided this could not happen again. I would not spend all my time promoting.

Now with my second novel, Untellable, I’m trying out advertising on Goodreads and Facebook. I’m going to add to this post occasionally over the next few weeks to let you know what the results are, doing a cost benefit analysis. I just started this a week ago. Here are the results so far.

Goodreads Results

Plenty of ad views, but no clicks. I’m paying 50 cents per click, so thus far, I haven’t spent any money. I do have some extra exposure, which I’m hoping will translate to sales over the next few weeks.

I also started a giveaway of Shades of the Future, so we’ll see how that campaign affects my visibility.

Facebook Results

Plenty of ad views, and a few clicks a day. I’m paying between 35 cents and 50 cents per click here, so I still haven’t spent much money. Unfortunately, I don’t think it’s translating to sales at this point, since there are no significant social actions.

Your Turn to Shout Out

Have you done any advertising online? How did it work out for you? What’s your best advice?

Revising Your #NaNoWriMo #Novel

Congratulations! You did it! You rocked the writing world with your bada$$ word count in November. Sit back, relax, and enjoy a bit of rest.

Okay, that’s enough. Are you ready to revise?

Your NaNoWriMo novel will most likely need several rounds of editing and revising before it’s reader worthy. This four step plan for the initial revision process is focused and easy to follow.

Revising a hard copy

Image by Syntaxoflife on Flickr

Step 1: Proofreading for Content

What this means is the author does a read through of the entire manuscript. Some authors will read it silently, but reading it aloud is more effective. Proofreading the writing aloud forces the writer to slow down and  concentrate on the rhythm, pitch, and tone of the words and passages. During this read aloud, passages that seemed witty on paper may reveal themselves as klunky or cliché. Other things that might be noted are holes in the plot, or characters acting out of character.

Although it’s tempting to fix these errors right away, now is not the time. Simply mark the passage needing work, and continue reading. This will keep the rhythm flowing and allow the author to maintain focus on the content, rather than trying to untangle problems.

After the story has been read aloud in its entirety, then the writer can go back and rewrite sections that need it, delete sections that serve no purpose, and add details and subplots that need development.

These are the things to focus on during the proofreading for content stage.

  1. Does every scene move the plot forward?
  2. Are there any holes in the plot?
  3. Are there any loose ends that need to be finished?
  4. Do characters maintain a stable identity (except for personal growth and change that is part of the plot), throughout the story?

Step 2: Proofreading for Tension

In this step, the author should have already made some revisions to improve the manuscript, and now a closer reading is needed to check for overall tension and microtension. Microtension is the uncertainty that keeps a reader reading from one sentence to the next, one paragraph to the next, one chapter to the next. In this second reading, things that are predictable will be easier to spot.

Also, in the case of a mystery or thriller, red herrings and foreshadowing can be refined. Red herrings should lure the reader toward a logical conclusion, albeit incorrect, but not give away the solution. Also, they must not be too obvious, or else the reader will spot them, making the mystery a less enjoyable read.

 Step 3: Copyediting a Book for Grammar and Syntax

This step is the most basic of the editing revising process. Checking for usage, proper grammar, spelling, and punctuation is something that can be done with a silent read. Mistakes may also be corrected as the writer moves through the manuscript. Using reference tools such as the book, Self-Editing for Fiction Writers by Renni Brown and Dave King, or Strunk and White’s The Elements of Style will help during this process.

Step 4: Polishing the Writing

This step is the most creative of all four. This is when the writer can use all the tips and tricks of figurative language to create imagery and emotion that will envelop the reader in the fictional world. Studying the work of writers who do a good job of evoking mood will help a person learn to do it well. It takes an ear for language, but it also is something that can be learned. The book Word Painting, A Guide to Writing More Descriptively, by Rebecca McClanahan is one that may help.

There you have it. This four step process for editing and revising a story takes time. You’ll want to go back over your novel to fix problem areas, perhaps several times. However, you can’t rush an error free, tightly plotted novel that sparkles with the high shine of fine writing.

Again, congratulations on completing the first draft! May the Goddess of Writing help you craft it into a masterpiece.

This is an adaptation of an article I published with Suite101 in 2010.

 

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What Teens Really Want to Read

It’s not often I come across a post so insightful that I write another post about it. However, this morning I read a post by Elizabeth Langston, author of Whisper Falls,  talking about her first author’s event with a teen book club. After the reading, she chatted with the teens about what they look for in books.

Four main things I took away from her interview:

  1. Teens want more than just paranormal and Twilight knockoffs. They want books about all types of relationships.
  2. Teens want depth and complexity in the books they read. (This warms my heart, since I spend all day teaching kids to choose books with depth and complexity.) *sigh* I’m fanning my face right now. I love teens!
  3. Teens look to friends first for book recommendations. After that, they rely on librarians, parents, and online places such as Goodreads. (Are you reading this, all you politicos who suggest cuts to library services? Librarians are still KEY to getting teens to read. WE NEED LIBRARIANS.)
  4. The cover is everything when it comes to choosing a book.

What do you think? Do you have teens in your life who’ve shared some tips about what they like to read?

If you’d like to read more, check out Elizabeth Langston’s post Be Not Afraid.

Best Blogs of the Week in #WriteTips, #Writing, #Amwriting

It’s back! I went on a short hiatus as I wove my way around the web on blog tour. But I missed sharing the wonderful tidbits I find during my meanderings. So here again are some posts you may have missed this week in my Twitter feed.

This week, I think the most thought provoking article I found was the one about racial profiling in YA literature. A librarian discovered by talking to teens that many of them feel they’re being stereotyped in many novels. You’ll find the link under the YA Lit subheading of this post.

Also, since it’s Friday, I’m blogging at Honey Creek Books. This week I dug up some trivia about the Fall Equinox and Harvest Moon happening this month. Fascinating stuff. Really.

Writing Inspiration/Motivation

Great advice from a master. http://fb.me/294qVL4oh 

A fellow writer shares a touching memoir of her battle against ovarian cancer. She’s a survivor! http://www.rubyslipperedsisterhood.com/saving-myself/ 

Learn the Craft of Writing

Should Books Be Priced According to Their Length? http://flpbd.it/GSIPQ 

The Publishing Process in Pictures (so funny & true!)http://blog.nathanbransford.com/2012/08/the-publishing-process-in-gif-form.html … via @NathanBransford#amwriting

Writing Jobs and Markets

#TMPress is now open to category #romance submissions!http://www.turquoisemorningpressbookstore.com/pages/category-romance-the-boutique-collection … #romlit#amwriting

Contemporary YA Pitch contest.http://tangledupinwords.blogspot.com/2012/09/big-news-book-nostalgia-and-impromptu.html … #Yalit #amwriting

No agent? No problem. Harper Voyager to Accept Unagented Manuscripts for Two Weeks http://www.mediabistro.com/galleycat/harper-voyager-to-accept-unagented-manuscripts-for-two-weeks_b57443 … via@galleycat #scifilit

Writing Resources

New Twitter Profile Tips for Writers http://www.mediabistro.com/galleycat/new-twitter-profile-tips-for-writers_b57767 …via @galleycat

YA Lit and MG Lit

Racial stereotyping in #YAlit? Thought provoking post here:http://www.teenlibrariantoolbox.com/2012/06/racial-stereotyping-in-ya-lit.html?m=1 … #amwriting

Yay! Love That Dog is on the list of most checked out #MGlit books!http://www.storysnoops.com/blog/?p=3946  What are your kids reading?

Interesting. 55% of YA Books Bought by Adultshttp://www.publishersweekly.com/pw/by-topic/childrens/childrens-industry-news/article/53937-new-study-55-of-ya-books-bought-by-adults.html … via @publisherswkly #yalit

Write well and write prolifically, my friends!

Best Blogs of the Week in #WriteTips, #Writing, #Amwriting

Here are some posts you may have missed this week in my Twitter feed. I’m posting the Best Blogs on Saturdays instead of Thursdays until my SHADES OF THE FUTURE blog tour is over at the end of August.

Writing Inspiration/Motivation

Increase productivity. Whistle while you work, but don’t tweet. http://tinyurl.com/88yy3tf via @AuthorMedia #amwriting #writetips

“I’ll have what she’s having.” How to write a speech, via Nora Ephron’s speech at Wellesly. http://americanspeakerforum.wordpress.com/2012/07/12/how-to-write-a-presentation-like-nora-ephron/ #amwriting #teaching

There’s no elevator to success. You have to take the stairs. via @JodyHedlund http://tinyurl.com/89q7348

Magic formula to blast through writer’s block? http://tinyurl.com/7xeohnc via Writing Spirit Blog #amwriting

Learn the Craft of Writing

Write your fiction series like a train. via @AshKrafton http://tinyurl.com/7p759vd #writing #amwriting

Find out about writing #historical #fiction from @ClaraGillow http://tinyurl.com/7l9hvqz #histfic #amwriting

Less is more. Cutting elements to fix a scene. http://tinyurl.com/72sv2tu via @Janice_Hardy #amediting #amrevising

Writing emotion via @StinaLL Great resources. http://tinyurl.com/6qfxs9d #amwriting #writetips

Writing Jobs and Markets

Call for guest bloggers on Writer Beware. http://tinyurl.com/d2lg9hj #writejobs #blogger

Writing Resources

Ten books for writers via Write to Done blog. http://tinyurl.com/7bd53qx #writetips #amwriting

Write well and write prolifically!

Best Blogs of the Week in #WriteTips, #Writing, #Amwriting, #Teaching, #Edtech

Here are some posts you may have missed this week in my Twitter feed. Bookmark this page so you can read them at your leisure.

Writing Inspiration/Motivation

How to master concentration when you have too much to do. http://tinyurl.com/7uzcp9p via @wordstrumpet #teaching #amwriting

Balancing #teaching & #writing. Part of a question & answer series by @wordstrumpet. http://tinyurl.com/6urwjqz #amwriting

Learn the Craft of Writing

Watch out for these money scams for #writers. http://tinyurl.com/7gqzdjr Via Writers Beware. #amwriting #writetips

Writing Contests and Markets

How #writing #contests can improve one’s game. http://tinyurl.com/7mpzdre via @querytracker #amwriting

Teaching Tips

Using dialogue tags and punctuation correctly. Always a bugaboo to #teach. http://tinyurl.com/85r2gdn #writetips via @querytracker

Here’s a list by Kate Messner of #teachers of #reading and #writing. http://bit.ly/MvWxCb

@inkyelbows Thanks for this list, Debbie! http://bit.ly/GP-librarians

Social Media Tips

How to schedule posts on your Facebook Author page timeline. http://tinyurl.com/cv6r73o #socialmedia #authors

RIP Nora Ephron

In memory of Nora Ephron, here’s her spoof of Dragon Tattoo ‘The Girl Who Fixed the Umlaut’. Such a funny writer. via @GrantaMag http://www.newyorker.com/humor/2010/07/05/100705sh_shouts_ephron

Write well and write prolifically!

Best Blogs of the Week in #WriteTips, #Writing #Amwriting, #YALit, #Teaching and more

Here are some posts you may have missed this week in my @suzannelilly Twitter feed. You can bookmark this page, (or better yet, follow this blog!)  and read them at your leisure.

Writing Inspiration/Motivation

Writing can kill you…what? Article in the Washington Post. http://wapo.st/GV6jfZ #amwriting #blogging

Increase your wordount output by knowing what you are writing. http://tinyurl.com/8ykaq76 via @wordstrumpet #amwriting

Learn the Craft of Writing

An editor shares an author’s pre & post edit work. Small changes to tighten up #writing. http://tinyurl.com/7tedvyf #writetips

Queries, Synopses, and Submissions

What to put in your bio if you don’t have any writing credits. http://wp.me/ppJnZ-1M1 via @behlerpublish #amwriting

Credentials schmedentials. Do you need them to be published? http://tinyurl.com/6sv4fj7 via @4kidlit #amwriting #writetips #yalit

Social Media Tips for Teachers and Writers

Teaching & Writing Resources

Royal resource for #teaching or #writing about Queen Victoria. Her journals available online. #history http://tinyurl.com/cgmkeek

How to use a school literary mag to inspire young writers. #teaching #writing #kidlit http://tinyurl.com/7qywlf8

Why 50% or more teachers burn out within 5 years & 7 things you can do to help. Works for writers, too. #teaching http://tinyurl.com/7borlso

Summer reading for #teachers. 5 books plus plenty more in the comments. http://tinyurl.com/74khkgq #summerreading #amreading

Just for Fun

15 Things You Should Give Up To Be Happy http://www.purposefairy.com/3308/15-things-you-should-give-up-in-order-to-be-happy/ via @purposefairy #happiness #Fridayfun

The Perfect Man, an Audi, and Chocolate? My response to a research study about what women want. http://www.honeycreekbooks.com/2012/06/perfect-man-audi-and-chocolate.html #Fridayfun

Bet you can’t look at this without smiling! via @LianaBrooks Thanks for the smile. tinyurl.com/78fqhx5 #Fridayfun

Write well and write prolifically, my friends!